Villain's Promise

I've enjoyed this a lot :) I really like Lucian so far, I'm not sure if you know this character but there's this old webtoon called Hooky and the character Nico is just who I kept imagining Lucian as. I look forward to the future updates :) I hope we can talk to Adam more as well and form sort of a elder sibling typa thing with him, of course you don't have to do it but I thought the idea would be fun since their interactions reminded me of just that!

lucian fanclub founder: me

I haven't played it yet, but I have a question: with a title like Villain's Promise.... can I romance the/a villain?

Also, is there a chance that we can have a mc that has a personality, but perfers to be silent most of the time? Like they could be kind but silent, or aloof and silent?

i love the story premise! didnt expect one of the ROs to die on the prologue

totes gave me a lil teary eyes. so im already heading towards the lucian route

Idk if I'm doing something wrong here because No matter what pronounce I choose or what gender I choose for each Li the game end up using they/them on almost every occasion, and sometimes some text shows up that doesn’t have anything to do with the option I've chosen.

Hi! Just a minor thing--when I selected the pronouns for all of the characters (I chose the all male option, if that changes anything), it seems there were a few missing bits in the dialogue. Lucian, for instance, was regularly referred to as they/them despite my choices indicating otherwise.
Additionally, some of the text in some spots seems to be missing? Instead of where I'm assuming a nickname would be, there's just a blank space. For example:
"Dialogue dialogue dialogue, (space) . Other than that, the game looks great! I can't wait to see where you go with this.

An overdue review for the revised prologue:

I'm not sure if the lack of choices is supposed to represent the MC being unable (in the prologue) to avoid their fated execution, but the lack of ability to have even superficial impact on the story altered my perception of the game. Obviously the whole point of the prologue is the execution, so I don't expect to be able to change anything, but the long passages of prose offered plenty of chances for surface-level "decisions" that wouldn't affect the narrative while still offering a sense of agency for the player, if not the MC. For example, maybe you don't have the choice to not trust your partner, but you could easily have different responses for how you confirm your (possibly misplaced) trust: Sincerely, reluctantly, bitterly, emotionally, etc. Other potential moments for this kind of thing could be your (internal) response to the distance between you and your partner, a choice to resist the pain or have some other (futile) response rather than just closing your eyes, having some kind of reaction at some point during your imprisonment/torture, and responding to the knight that helps you to the throne room. Nothing really changes except a few lines of text, but it would drastically up the immersion factor, at least for persnickety types like myself, and it would break up the long pages of Having Things Done To You by People You (The Player) Don't Yet Know. The effect might be different for someone who's been following the tumblr and taking part in the Discord, but at least some people (like myself) won't be coming in with that information, so any deeper meaning or emotional impact could be lost in a prologue that's more like reading a novel than playing interactive fiction.

This isn't to say that the reading was unpleasant, as your prose is rich and evocative and you have a particular knack for characterization, as characters have distinct voices even if they have little more than a few lines. If I'd gone into this expecting pure prose, I'd be extremely pleased with it and interested in reading more; I'm still extremely interested, but I went into it as a player of interactive fiction, so my expectations were a little different. The only choices you have in-story is to skip the torture, which isn't so much a choice in-story as it is a meta-choice to avoid a scene, and your final response in court. I did have something dramatic planned, but I found myself so stymied by the lack of player agency (as opposed to character agency) that I seized the first chance I (the player) had to actually do something and wound up telling the court to do something anatomically unpleasant with an extremely unsuitable instrument. ... Though I like to think that was also in-character for the MC, all things considered! The lack of 'personalization,' not to be confused with customization, also kept me from feeling particularly attached to or invested in the MC, which is a problem I often have with more linear/stratified forms of IF, like visual novels.

Which, again, doesn't mean that this prologue is bad; far from it, in fact! If the lack of even superficial options is supposed to be indicative of the MC's railroading, in contrast with their post-revival options in the main game, then feel free to ignore just about everything I said above. In either case, I'll still be watching this game carefully and looking forward to how it grows.

My last words were, "Today, may the dead rest in peace. Goodbye". I really liked the prologue and the elements in it, waiting to see the final piece

My final words were "May your future be tainted with blood." Overall, this was a great prologue. Can't wait to see the completed project.

My Last words were "All I wanted was for Lucian to be happy.." x'd,, Anyways I enjoyed playing! (Reading). Ngl I almost shed a tear while playing this..

the game was very good , and yeah i chose ' Death to all kings ' as my last line .

Pls when will next update come ?

yooo why did i not find this earlier????? this is so fukin good?? i was not expecting any of this. the way i went from almost crying to legit raging when reading this..author i love you so much. also lucian 😭 ❤️

oh my g o d I was not ready for something this well written. I am blown away by your choice to have us literally type out our last words, that is genius. Good lord. You’re gonna blow this out of the water I tell you what

this is so interesting, I would love to read more :D

Woah this is great. I remember when it was really short before. It's like watching a child grow up to become a adult in control of their life.

Re-reading the prologue is just good satisfaction but like I don´t know what to do now while waiting for the first chapter update 

 Wow, I love this new prologue, it's so much better. Things that were confusing before bc of the lack of information are now mysterious for the same reason, and I fell like it is overall better written now.

I really want to know how relationships will work out not only for the Mc, but between each Ro as well. You did a good job by making them have their own lives and relationships without overshadowing Mc or making Mc the center of their existence. Kinda made me invested in them outside of what they can be for Mc. (Wich is hard to do)

I'm curious about how MC's interaction with some Ro's will play out too, especially the ones that ~light spoiler~ were in the execution, whether they're entirely guilt or not, they all had a hand in what happened even if not directly, so I can imagine a MC that would hate or fear(even without meaning to) some of them, and how Mc would have to act like they've never met before even knowing what they do. And the drama is just *chefs kiss* perfect, can't wait for more after having a taste of this now.

Man, i was getting so hyped through this and then ran into the end sobs

Great job tho, I loved it

oh and i found a left over from variables once inerogations starts

"Norocos was usually known for it's amazing rehabilitating prisons, because at the behest of $C, Rautinte's only heir, the system went through a major reformation in the past few years"

Question, while playing the prologue they were mentioning this: $C Is it a mistake or something part of the story? I don't know how to pronounce it haha

I thought I was missing it, so have been stumbling around in search for the chapters after the prologue, but ah well, thank you, enjoyed the short prologue, looking forward to the next update.

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Very exciting so far!

I love it!

So, I made my MC cried and I was like "Ooooh things are bound to be interesting no" but then the demo ends -_-

Anyway! This has me intrigued! Will definitely look forward to more of this <3

Haha, for last words I was really dramatic. "You will regret this and I will be laughing when this corrupt kingdom falls" Lol, I don't even know the plot but I like dramatics. I hope you continue this, it's very interesting!

I didnt know the last words were meant to be insulting the court, I chose the last words to be "I LIKE MEN!"

seems intriguing, I only wish it was at least a chapter long so that we could get a better idea for the story